Kawaiiprincess recently posted a story titled 'Me and my bro having fun in the bath tub' in which the author explained it was his or her first story, and asked the readers opinion. As rough around the edges as it was with too little details needed to allow the reader time to get into it, I thought the for a first time effort, it showed a possibility that the author might be one of the rare few that had an imagination that could write good stories. In order to encourage the author, I took that short piece and enhanced it, quadrupling the size, hoping to show what should be done to a story in the future before posting it. It's up to the original author to continue where they left off, hopefully this can be used as a guidance as to how to strengthen initial thoughts.

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Currently, I am a senior in high school known as one of the untouchable 'hotties' to the boys in the school, though of course that doesn't stop them from trying. With long blonde hair and deep brown eyes, with a shape that even has some of the teachers sneaking peeks at my 37C cups, I must admit that I enjoy the attention.

I've always been known as a 'looker'. As far back as when I was ten, I was known as the prettiest girl in my family among my cousins and when I started filling out in grade school, suddenly I saw the boys taking notice, my to my secret enjoyment. Still, I must admit that even as I was growing up, there was only one boy that I truly 'loved' and that was my older brother Tommy.

This is the story of the day I lost my virginity to him four years ago...

By then, even though I was a virgin, I knew about sex, learning from friends, school, my mother, and of course the internet, as I'd had online access since I first got my computer when I was still a preteen. Because my parents didn't know anything at all about computers they never had enough knowledge to check on what I looked at, so I was left on my own, which of course soon had me visiting sites I shouldn't have, mainly sex sites. I don't know why, but my huge turn-on was incest, father-daughter, uncle-niece, and of course brother-sister, which then led me to masturbation and fantasizing. Yeah, I was barely in my teens when I began playing with myself with a mental picture of older brother 'doing it' to me.

Although I never told anyone at the time, I secretly wanted to have sex with Tommy, though of course, I'd never 'really' do that, especially because of the 'good girl' I was. With both of our parents working, he and I spent a lot of time alone together after school, often spending time with each other instead of doing homework, which we'd put off until later in the night, because we enjoyed being alone together so much; we would always get along so well. Sometimes, we would physically play wrestle or pillow fight, or he would 'tickle attack' me, and that always thrilled me. He was really gentle with me, he would make me laugh and I would blush at the stuff he would say to me.

At the time, I was a really shy girl, so I never told him how much I liked him. I was too embarrassed that he might see me as 'crazy girl'. I would have died if he ever found out that I thought about him when I masturbated!

Everything changed that  hot late September afternoon. I was trying out for the Freshmen cheerleader squad, and came home feeling grungy after practice. Still wearing my outfit, I saw that Tommy seemed to take notice of me (I swear that at one time I saw him looking directly at the crotch of my panty outfit, and when he looked up to see I was watching him, he turned red) but it really didn't register anything in my brain. Perhaps I was too tired to even think about it.

Anyway, after going into the fridge and having a few swallows of a 'Monster', I told my brother that I was going up to get cleaned up.

Once inside the bathroom, I put the plug in the tub, turned on the water, poured some bubble bath in, and began to undress, my back to the door. I had just pushed down my panties to the floor and straightened up when I heard a noise and half-turned. To my shock, my brother had quickly entered the room and closed the door behind him. Totally nude, I must have reddened from head to foot from embarrassment. Up until then, no male had ever seen me without clothes, except Daddy, a long time before.

I gasped aloud, "T-Tommy... Wh-what are you doing in here?" His eyes were all over me, and I was flushed.

He suddenly turned away to lock the door while I quickly grabbed a towel to somewhat cover my trembling body. I was scared, but not afraid, if that makes sense. He quickly locked the door, then turned back to look at me. I swear that he was trying to look right through that towel. I can't explain, but I was feeling excited in spite of being upset that he was in the bathroom with me.

"Please get out," I quietly pleaded.

Looking up into my frightened face, he said, ''Please, Kai, don't make me go..."

"B-but y-you shouldn't...we shouldn't...you...it's wrong for you to be here, bro..."

"I know, but I can't help it, sis. I've been feeling for you for so long, I just can't hold it inside anymore...''

Oh my god, what was he saying? Was Tommy feeling the same things for me that I was feeling for him? This was so crazy...we were brother and sister. I turned away as he hurried over to me. He quickly grabbed me from behind and my heart began racing as he reached around and took the towel from my clutching fingers; for some reason I relinquished my grip and I trembled anew upon that I was being stripped of my covering.

I wanted to tell him to stop, but my voice had temporarily deserted me. My mind was racing and my body began heating as he gently began rubbing my pink nipples with his warm fingers.

"Mmmmm..." An involuntary murmur came from deep inside my throat and my brother started softly and teasingly licking my neck, as his hands continued to play with my aroused boobs.

Finally, I found my voice, gasping out, "Tommy...stop! Cut it out! We c-can't... What if Mom comes home...?!"

"Ah c'mon, Kai. She won't be home until late..." <kiss> <gentle suck> <kiss> on neck, causing moan... "Stop pretending Sweetie...you like this, don't you?"

Oh god, I did. I was trembling like a leaf. I didn't care how wrong this was...wasn't this something that I had fantasized about for so long? As my mind was racing and I was trying to think rationally, my brother had quickly pulled his boxers down to his knees and suddenly my mind exploded. Tommy's cock was rubbing against my ass, he was purposely rubbing it against me. I could feel it's hot hardness and I was so excited. Unable to stop myself I was moaning aloud.

I managed to gasp out, "Tommy, no...stop it!" I loved it so much but I just couldn't admit it to him, could I?

''Ah c'mon..sis,'' he urged.

I don't know how long he was rubbing himself against me while fondling my breasts and kissing and sucking my neck, but it certainly took me to a level of total willingness...no make that read want. Then he was pushing his dick between my thighs, actually rubbing that hardness over the slit, over and over, in and out, gently...gently...slowly...slowly... until I got really wet... my nipples were harder than they'd ever been.

My body was gently trembling, my mind was racing, when suddenly, out of nowhere, I gasped aloud, ''Fuck me, bro!'' shocking us both.

As soon as I said that, I covered my face, not knowing how that had come out of me and not knowing how he would react. I felt him turning me around. He then took my hands from my face, and when he did, I saw surprise and excitement clearly evident in his eyes.

Walking me backwards, he then pressed me back against the bathroom wall with his body, his breathing heavy. I gasped when I felt his hard cock poking at me, once again up between my legs, this time from the front, as he whispered to me, ''Can you say that again?''

My heart was beating like a thousand times a second; so hard I thought it could pound itself right through my chest. I could see that my brother was feeling as out of his head as I was, and I knew that once I repeated those words that we'd be committing the ultimate in taboos...INCEST!!!

I said it quietly, ''F-fuck me...''

He pushed my legs up and put his warm cock inside my little wet kitty...