User perv4lilgrrls | Commented

- 1 + > the overall storyline is good, slightly quick in the progression, details lacking a bit and grammar/spelling not the best.

> really good story to embellish more. i really love where he really quit caring her age and just wants to fuck her every and any way. this is where you can get detailed more and erotic.

> hope to see a second part and where we go from this point. many avenues to pursue. keep it up.

have a wonderful day

Mom sucks her son's cock daily... by

MammaR 4543 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4541 days ago

- 1 + bravo ... bravo quite an exceptional story, very well written. i truly hope there is more to the story. thanks again and keep up the great work. lilgrrlperv@yahoo.com

Helping younger brother Part 1 by

anonymous 4549 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4549 days ago

- 0 + a little quick with not much substance, but still good overall.

One of Mom's Guys: My First Time - Part 1 by

JillyBeen 4601 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4601 days ago

- 0 + nice story, can't wait until part 2

Forbidden Lust Part 2 by

cassilac 4607 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4606 days ago

- 1 + the story is coming along great, maybe just a bit more detail. more build-up to all that happens, how your pussy starts to drip, nipples get tall and hard, etc. i'm waiting for #3

Forbidden Lust Part 1 by

cassilac 4608 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4607 days ago

- 1 + it seems a little rushed in the setup, maybe a few more details. build their tension a bit more. overall it seems as though it will be a great story. please continue and we shall see.

It shouldn't have happened but it did by

klm0559 4632 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4632 days ago

- 0 + overall you have a nice theme. it seems just a bit pushed, rushed. take your time and give a bit more detail to build up some parts. maybe a little more suspense at points. the fear of fucking your daughter in law and perils if son found out. etc. etc. this will make it more of a story. but also remember that some people just want dirty sex and a straight fuck and run. when you find your audience they will let you know. first try was a good try. keep up the work and i wish you only the best.

Help Me Daddy - part 1 by

scooterkw 4859 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4859 days ago

- 0 + can't wait for the granddaugther !!!!!

MILF: A virgin's story by

Trap 4859 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4858 days ago

- 0 + where's the story ?

Alex & Angela by

UpperTown 4889 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4890 days ago

- 0 + please continue

Daddy's Special Little Girl Part 2- Daddy is my Prince by

XXXAnnabellaXXX 4909 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4909 days ago

- 0 + progressing quite nicely, please continue. can't wait for more.

Me My Mum And A fucking wild Year by

parabe2 4920 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4920 days ago

- 0 + hopefully part two is as hot as mom. seems like she wants alot of sonny-boy. get yourself a sister with her and some real fun.

Getting Fucked by Uncleâ€¦ Part 2 by

dreamgirl 4955 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 4954 days ago

- 0 + just keep them and him cummin, practice makes perfection

My Baby Girl Daughter II by

Camilo 5041 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 5040 days ago

- 0 + WTF was this ?

My Sister Becky by

robbiemd1993 5050 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 5048 days ago

- 0 + good beginning, becky is first ?, then mom ?, then both ?, just check some of the spelling, keep it going

TRUE STORY: Ã¢â‚¬Å“AT 13, MY DOG TOOK MY VIRGINITYÃ¢â‚¬Â by

BuccaBabe@Yahoo.com 5067 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 5067 days ago

- 1 + do you order hamburgers without meat or buns too ?

Alice Part 2 by

Hateshiganai 5171 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 5171 days ago

- 0 + what's the point of the story if jenny doesn't get involed ?

Daddy's Little Girl - Part 3 (Daddy's Fuck Doll) by

kinky_katty 5222 days ago

perv4lilgrrls 5222 days ago

- 0 + may i cum with uncle jack ? good stuff

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