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mykyl0 Member Since October 19, 2009
Mother finds quenching son's thirst for sex, a great responsibility.
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 1 + Very well written with a compelling and distinct voice. I'd like to see more of your work.
Ashley...naughty fun with Uncle Dave
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 9 + Some capitalization errors and spacing issues, but you can really write some hot stories. Keep it up!
A Get Together
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 5 + i loved it
The Fraternity
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 10 + Very hot.
My hot ass, 13 yr old niece
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 10 + People are going to complain about the big tits on a 13 year old, but I like it. Just make the sex more detailed and keep writing.
Naughty 13 year old Kelly (Part 3)
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 5 + Love the stories. Want Kelly's ass getting fucked by her brother.
All I wanted to do was fuck the shit out of her...
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 3 + I can't say I liked your story. It didn't realy convey the sensations the characters experienced, have an interesting plot, or do anything for me. On top of that, it felt really heartless.
Ashley...My first time with a stranger!
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 10 + That was one sexy story.
Sexy Little Slut
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 10 + This one manages to be insanely hot, and there isn't even any sex! Please, keep writing.
My Aunt Tilly
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 10 + Simply incredible. Please keep writing. The only thing I might suggest is a little more dialogue and a little more description for the feelings, such as the actual intercourse.
Bernard
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 9 + I liked your writing a lot. I wold have liked some more dialogue and detail, especially when the protagonist actually got his ass fucked by the dog, but it was still really good.
Slutgirl's First Threesome
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 9 + This is a very interesting story stylistically. You have skill with a pen, my friend.
My sweet little Tanya part 2
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 6 + Great concept. Now honestly, have you ever heard of punctuation? There wasn't a whole quotation mark in that entire thing, which is odd considering you had a lot of dialogue. Explain this please.
The Sleepover in the Closet. (Edited Version)
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 8 + I like this story quite a lot, but it lacks a few things. First, basic English fundamentals, such as always capitalizing names. Second, more description on the sensation. And third, you do a good job when you try to paint a picture of the situation, but s
My Bi-Sexual Life Part 3
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 8 + I like it, but it seems like you could expand on the actions occuring. Also, a little dialogue would enhance your stories.
Rated R for sex
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 8 + Keep it coming.
Angel part one
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 9 + I can't actually think of any suggestions. The detail with the picture was very nice since it brought the story down to earth. Anyway, please keep writing.
Amy's Surprise
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 8 + I really liked this one, but I was confused with Amy's backstory. Is she a transvestite or a girl born with a penis? I think a nice saving grace would be to lose the balls and give her a vagina so she is a hermaphrodite.
Girl Scout Chronicles, Part Seven
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 8 + Not my favorite one of your stories, but still very good.
“I need your help. Can I Come Over?” REPOST
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 5 + Hope we're getting more. The fact that the amount of sex this kid had just snowballed was pretty unbelievable, but it made for a hot story.
GLEN AND HIS FRIEND FUCK MY WIFE
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 1 + I going to try to make this as clear as possible. For a story to be considered good, it should have the following: imager, paragraphs, proper spelling and punctuation, and good buildup. And certainly no capslock.
My First Lover
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 9 + Yeah, the review's title is the title of a chapter from a Tim O'Brien book. Anyway, I was really impressed with your writing style. It was engaging and compelling. I'm giving you a nine because a ten from me means pretty damn close to perfect. I just want
Birthday night
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 6 + You tried, but your english is atrocious. First off, you don't need : to introduce quotes. Second, what is "and so wet they were"? Yoda speak?
In the Bedroom
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 3 + I like the aim of this story, but you don't exactly meed any goals. The fact that everything is jumbled into one semi-legible block of text does not help your score. Also, you fail to have much story content, which is bad. Add dialogue, paragraphs, imager
Horny Drunk Girl
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 8 + I really enjoyed your story.
The Supply Closet PLEASE RATE
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 9 + This story could go so many places it's ridiculous. My only problem here is a lack of setup and the disgustingly short length.
Ashley...more fun with Uncle Dave
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 10 + I was waiting for your next release. Again, very hot and sexy. Keep it up!
Crossing The Line To The Promised Land
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 10 + Really good. I loved some of the imagery and figurative language, such as "I have no idea if I was capable of forming words at this point. There was no blood in my brain cavity as every drop was being used further south at the moment." Keep it up.
Truth or Dare
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 5 + That was so hot. Please post the rest.
Can i cum around tomorrow
mykyl0 5563 days ago
- 8 + First off, it was good, but I'm going to talk more about the problems since praise doesn't make for improvement. For dialogue, you're supposed to make a new paragraph whenever a new character starts speaking. Even if you'll just do one line of text, you s