mykyl0
Member Since October 19, 2009
His Twin Girls - 1
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bjack
5516 days ago
mykyl0
5563 days ago
bjack
5516 days ago
mykyl0
5563 days ago
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Keep it up!
Uncle Wayne Moves In
by
The_Purvv
The_Purvv
Hot, excellent, awesome. I generally go for the more raunchy stuff than the Lolita-esque stuff (meaning Nabokovian), but that was brilliant. Keep it up.
The Dirtier, The Better
by
DamonX_200879
DamonX_200879
Teriffic setup in this one, but it feels that the actual sensations of the sex are left out. Even if you say something, just try restating it in different words. But overall, a very good story.
A Sluts Tale (part 2-my dads co-workers)
by
jeffal
jeffal
I agree with the other comments about poor grammer, punctuation, spelling, etc. I also agree with the lack of realism, but sometimes these fantasy-like stories are a good thing. If you took the time to revise this, it would be a good story. That also mean
A SlutsTale (part one- how i became a slut)
by
jeffal
jeffal
Unoriginal and poorly written, but erotic none the less. Please work on your writing, grammer, punctuation, and pretty much every aspect of the piece. Either way, keep trying.
how I started sharing her
by
speedntrixi
speedntrixi
Only problem were the big paragraphs, but the story was incredible. Your writing is very polished for a site that's used to posts mostly consisting of webcaps and typos.
My Slutty Sister
by
nickmuk
nickmuk
It's a good start, but really not much more than that. It feels more like the outline of a story since it's lacking the details and buildup I normally look for. For example, don't tell me that she "demanded I eat her pussy", have something allong the line