FuzzBuckit
Member Since October 09, 2010
Summer With My Cousin
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dmctalker
4680 days ago
FuzzBuckit
4674 days ago
dmctalker
4680 days ago
FuzzBuckit
4674 days ago
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Great first story. I really hope you continue this and make it a series.
School of sex Series Ep.1
by
LikeABoss
LikeABoss
Fully agree with everyone else. Also add some more descriptions, and use sentences to get your point across rather than "this happened, then this happened, then this happened," it doesn't do much for readers.
Spying Sister (rewritten)
by
spookyvampire01
spookyvampire01
Yes please write some more. This was good. I like the idea,
Working at my Job
by
SilkyBitch
SilkyBitch
When you said VanessaEvans inspired you, you weren't lying. This was just as good as hers though. Hopefully you continue writing, and can take this series somewhere new and equally fantastic.
The Organisation of Sluts for the Pleasure of select men - Chapter Three, The Night Before Induction
by
DirtyDomWriter
DirtyDomWriter
Great job. I look forward to many more installments of this series.
A Boy and His Flashlight Chapter 16
by
dandalk
dandalk
Loved it as always Dandalk. I always look forward to your new installments and stories.
Xavier, Philip and Alexandra - Chapter 1
by
Alfred9
Alfred9
Looking forward to more. Can't wait to read what happens when Alexandra joins in.
The Organisation of Sluts for the Pleasure of select men - Chapter Two, Meeting the Owner
by
DirtyDomWriter
DirtyDomWriter
Great job, can't wait to find out what happens back at the house. Just spell check before you upload.
2 Teens On New Year Eves
by
hotandwet18
hotandwet18
I liked the story, a few pointers though. Proofread, make sure he words are all spelled correctly, that way the readers are always engaged. One little mistake in an important section can bring the whole thing down. Also, try to structure your stories, instead of one big block add paragraphs. It's just easier on the eyes and makes reading the story easier too. One last thing, try to describe the characters within the story, instead of telling us what they look like before hand. Describe their bodies when the clothes are coming off, or when you meet a new character, it just adds to the overall experience. It's a good idea, and I'd just say keep trying, you'll only get better the more you write.
A Boy and His Flashlight Chapter 15
by
dandalk
dandalk
I really look forward to your stories. Keep them coming.
My hot sister Becky
by
rmd1993
rmd1993
I don't see why you can't do both. If you have another idea there's no reason not to write it up. But if you still have more ideas for this one, then write those too. I really liked this story and would love to see it continue.
The Massage - Chapter 5 - The Watching
by
girthguy
girthguy
Different. That was very different and intriguing, in a good way. I hope this doesn't mean that the series is over though :(
A Boy and His Flashlight Chapter 8
by
dandalk
dandalk
Fantastic. I'm really liking this story, mainly because of Evan, who while getting what he wants, won't abuse his power or those he cares about. Can't wait for the next installment.
A Boy and His Flashlight Chapter 3
by
dandalk
dandalk
I really want to read where this goes. I love mind control stories and you seem to come up with some very good scenarios. Again, keep up the great work dandalk. I love your work.
Adam comes home for Christmas
by
UpperTown
UpperTown
I agree you should continue and also agree that some of the words were a little silly. I understand not wanting to be repetitive and using different words, but be a little more selective. Good start though, and definitely write the continuation.
My Wish is Their Command Chapter 10
by
dandalk
dandalk
Very good story, sad that it started and ended so quick. Maybe you could do a second part, after his wife has passed and his kids are older or something, and how he lives then, but that is only me wanting to read more of these characters. Great way to end it, though.
My Wish is Their Command Chapter 9
by
dandalk
dandalk
Fantastic as usual dandalk. Love your work, keep it up.
All I want for Christmas
by
goofy
goofy
Very enjoyable read. Well paced, and interesting. Would love to read more from you.
My Wish is Their Command Chapter 4
by
dandalk
dandalk
Fantastic. This is now one of my favourite series on this site. Great work dandalk, can't wait for the next one!
The Massage - Chapter 3 - The Surprise
by
girthguy
girthguy
Great work. I like where you took this, keep it up.
family Love part 2
by
anonymous
anonymous
Great job, would love to read more. Just watch out for the spelling mistakes.
Helping younger brother part 2
by
anonymous
anonymous
I would also like a continuation. And would also agree that bringing the parents in would be a fine touch. Good work.
Parents teach their daughter part 3
by
Morgen
Morgen
Yeah this is great. I love your stories. Keep them going Morgen.