The_Purvv
Member Since October 19, 2009
Sarah and Daddy part 1
by
Morgen
Morgen
As with all of your stories, I look forward to the next chapter. Arguably, you're the best author on this site. As an 'author' myself, usually writing of incest, I appreciate your work and try not to miss any of your stories. May I suggest that you consider posting elsewhere too, at a site that would welcome your efforts: namely storiesonline(dot)net. I suspect you wouldn't regret doing so.
Jim's teenage daughter part 6
by
UpperTown
UpperTown
Your 'story' shows one of the problems with this site. All I've ever been able to find is Part 1 and Part 4. Now comes Part 6. Where are 2, 3 and 5? Maybe you could repost the story in its entirety.
Unexpected stop.
by
Morgen
Morgen
Always enjoy your stories. I often try to end my stories with a twist, when possible. Reading yours, I thought one more sentence added to the end, would be appropriate to pay back the rapist. "It was nice to have sex after the last few months of self-imposed abstention; ever since finding out that I was HIV-positive." Regards, A Purvversion/The Purvv/et al.
the neighbors daughter
by
sexer1
sexer1
This would have been so much better if you simply made a little more effort. Bringing this story up in any word processor with its spellcheck turned on, and spending an extra ten minutes or so simply fixing the errors found, and then making sure that every paragraph began with a capital letter, would have certainly improved this greatly. Admittedly, doing so would not have fixed everything, but you would have a lot more people looking forward to part 2 (which is definitely needed).
Storm Child part 4
by
Morgen
Morgen
It's always a pleasure to find something new posted by you. I'm never disappointed with your writing and this one was no exception. Thanks for all your efforts.
closed story
by
kawaiiprincess
kawaiiprincess
From this author's view, the scene you depicted undoubtedly is one that occurs more often than people admit, but sadly too few stories are written about such. Thus, I'd encourage your thoughts, but alas, your writing needs a lot of improvement. What you wrote should be a general outline from which you should sit down and put some meat on the bone, maybe describing the looks of one or both of the siblings, telling what went through the girl's mind (and her body feelings) when he first entered the bathroom (why she didn't yell to her parents, etc) and all during the episode. Of course, the actual activity should be lengthened greatly with descriptive data. Good luck. I'm at Yahoo with an email of purvvauthor, should you want more detailed advise. PS: I just edited and posted your story, though I'm not sure if I posted correctly as I haven't posted in a while.
The first Meeting
by
ThePassionWriter
ThePassionWriter
Please don't add any more until you become even slightly serious about writing. This drivel was an insult to every reader. I wouldn't know where to start the criticism, there is so very much wrong with this. I've been reading this stuff for 50 years and this is by far the worst piece of trash I've ever commented on.
Me & My Sister (PART 2)
by
everlastingxxx
everlastingxxx
Most sites have a minimum of 10KB for a story to even be considered, and those are the bare minimum because that only equals a few pages, and is usually not nearly enough for readers. Even so 10KB would seem enormous with what little you've written so far, not even 4KB. Spend some time with your imagination and your writing instead of trying to solicit for some weak attempt. May I humbly suggest that you don't post anything until your story is complete and then make sure it is of a decent size...my suggested limit being 20KB.
My brother Erik part 4
by
germanhottie
germanhottie
It would seem that you've never met an apostrophe that you recognized :) That's only meant to encourage you to spend a bit more time with the edit before posting. It is a nice story that you obviously spent some time with. Thanks. Should you care to see how a fellow author can bastardize your story for his own pleasure by making a totally different story from yours, you can email me at yahoo. The name to use is purvvauthor.
Regards
Regards
My Mother( MY $100 WHORE) PT. 3
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gharper
gharper
I'm astounded at that guy who commented that this story is awful and is in terrible need of spell check, etc. As an author of over 100 well received erotica stories and a reader of thousands, the grammar/punctuation/spelling of this one is as well put tog
fun with bro
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haverhilluk
haverhilluk
Very nice effort. A kindly editor would help your writings a lot. Too often there is a comma where there should be a period. Further, some of the dialog is a bit on the not to be believed side. Still, this is much better than the majority of stories here.
Ultimate car sex incest
by
dragonserpent
dragonserpent
Most of the first half of this story is 'Rachel's Bumpy Ride' by Denial. Please don't steal. If you're going to make something up, give credit to whichever author's wrote material that you apparently put together.
My Summer Job: Katie
by
Jamie_Coles
Jamie_Coles
One of the best stories I've found on this site, save for mine, lol. Seriously, the only thing missing was what I suspect will be a part 2. Hopefully that's as well written.
Emmy's Foot Massage
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Goody13
Goody13
I'm going to try to hunt for more of your stories, but I wanted to comment that your story was one of the rare very good ones that seem to pop up here once in a blue moon. Congrats from an author who has posted over 100 stories at various sites.
Meagan's Desire
by
The_Cow
The_Cow
A rarity indeed for this site. Well structured, with barely a typo. The story was believable and arousing, which is really what the readers look for. Congrats from someone whose written and posted over 100 stories himself. I'll look forward from more of yours.
Incest - My Brother-In-Law
by
chrissytrishton
chrissytrishton
I'm sorry to say that there are way too many things wrong for me to give a real critique and maybe even make your story read properly. If you care, I am purvvauthor and can be emailed at yahoo.
My Wife's Niece Part 2
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Exciter1369
Exciter1369
I'm not sure what the earlier comments meant as I didn't read that first part. However, I have to tell you that there is not much reading unless it's at least 20KB. This is not even 4KB. If you're serious about writing, then spend some time filling out the details. There just isn't anything here.
Making Mark Mine (Part I)
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SweetSarahG
SweetSarahG
It's truly nice to see someone make an effort at writing. My only complaint with writers who put chapters on this site, quite often it's impossible to find the related chapters. For this site, if you want the readers to read the full story, I'd strongly suggest that you wait until you've written the whole thing before posting as one story. If you must post by chapter, you're probably better off finding a more reader friendly site.
Destroying Agatha
by
Luvergyrl
Luvergyrl
Truly one of the best on this site in a long time. I personally wouldn't have cut short the fuck to change the father into a demanding pervert type, but that's a matter of style. I would have preferred that he cum inside her and maybe she could have cleaned him up with her mouth to arouse him again. Now reading this, I'm going to have to hunt down other stories of yours. BTW it was very impressive as to be nearly error free.
The
by
Lilly.Pop
Lilly.Pop
The best DD I've read in a long time. If you want I'll send you an gentle edit of it, with a few flaws pointed out. I can be reached at yahoo using the name purvvauthor. Good luck with any future stories. The Purvv/Purvversion
Ministers Daughter
by
Archimanda
Archimanda
Hey, nice story. To me it needed more flesh. I did an edit, doubling its size. It's yours for the keeping if you want. I can be reached at Yahoo using my name purvvauthor.
Daddy's Little Girl - Part 1 (The Dirty Panties)
by
kinky_katty
kinky_katty
For a first effort, it certainly shows that you have great potential for writing hot, imaginative stories, though there are a lot of bumps in the road. I'm looking forward to part 2 (and more if there is more). May I suggest you send me your next installment for an edit before you post it. I'm purvvauthor and I'm at Yahoo.
Sweet Dreams
by
toribrinkley
toribrinkley
Truly excellent. Well written. Each of us has our own style, so I may be asking too much for you to give more details of the actual sex when he gives his precious little girl what she wants and needs.
I took the 4200 characters of your story between 'One Sunday we were playing in the garden' to ' guessed she had orgasmed' and filled it in with much hotter sex and quite enjoyable. Should you want it, it's yours to own, to post or whatever you choose. Even if you don't want to do that, it may give you some guidance for future stories. Let me know at yahoo, yeah, dot com. That's purvvauthor before the at sign.
Regards