LucOuarm
Member Since October 19, 2009
Confused!!!!!!!!
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flip
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LucOuarm
5572 days ago
flip
5101 days ago
LucOuarm
5572 days ago
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I'm confused too about why you did not continue on and have a complete story for the readers.
Absolute Crap
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Bensid
Bensid
I get it: "No Soap Radio." This means you have read far too many of these stories and need to try something new. Anyhow, you are absolutely correct!
The Most Humiliating Day of My Life
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Diablo13440
Diablo13440
Great idea for a story, but a little more grammar/spacing work could help. By the way, he, the geek, is on tape with all the hot girls giving him some fun. Who is being humiliated?
My lovely neighbour
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davidj
davidj
I liked the story, but would have liked it more with better SPACING and use of proper punctuation (like quotation marks). Both would have made it easer to read and given it a bigger impact.
Family Incest - Part 2
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asiansex
asiansex
I don't see why this was in the "Erotic Poetry" section. Due ot spacing problems, it does not even qualify as blank verse.
Summer Tea Time
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dexterndidi
dexterndidi
This was a nice well-written beginning, but why submit a "tease." It also needed better paragraphing.
Sex tips for all
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SWEETCHEEKSSWEETSTUFF
SWEETCHEEKSSWEETSTUFF
The only fault I can see is that this is too short an article.
Payback is Hell
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sugaray
sugaray
Talk about "displaced aggression!" It looks as if poor Sarah took a beating because of Faye and Jerry.
Hot MILF co-worker
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cgpubr04
cgpubr04
The story was not submitted in the disjointed form shown here, and I apologize for its appearance. I spent a great deal of time arranging the spacing and the paragraphs and am not pleased with how this site scrambled it. Anyhow, thanks everyone for the
on the couch
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mandi92
mandi92
I agree with the above reviewers. This was an idea for a story. Maybe you can look over what you submitted and develop something readable and even interesting. Try using better grammar and spelling too.
a day i'll never forget(true story)
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gman995
gman995
Is this supposed to be some kind of "stream of consciousnes" or does it just suck out loud?
Sara And I (A True Story)
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ronstevezie
ronstevezie
Some minor spacing problems, but a good job. This was really a steamy tale.
a gymnasts first time (part 5)
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hothornyhannah
hothornyhannah
It starts off rather abruptly, but where's the rest of it? I think you needed to submit at least twice as much if you want a decent opinion about whether or not to continue.
Long Ago (Repaired)
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LucOuarm
LucOuarm
Yes, before there were too many nosy people wanting to control everyone, things were often better.
The Girl Down The Hall
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jhosmer
jhosmer
Too short means that the author missed an opportunity to develop this episode into a nice story. Instead he has produced a "tease."
Icy Hot
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Fly4aWhiteGuy
Fly4aWhiteGuy
Okay, you meant the heat was not working, not the AC. But otherwise, this was a nice story.
The Engagement Test - Chapter 1
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RebelBelle
RebelBelle
Does anyone want to be the son-in-law to this despot???
A Little Bit of Force
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LucOuarm
LucOuarm
Thanks to all those who took time to write a comment, even if you did not like the story. I cana't see where it is "racist," so I can't respond to that. As far as spelling, it was checked. Perhaps something was missed, but it is not obvious to me, so s
A Little Bit of Force
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LucOuarm
LucOuarm
Many thanks for your remarks, kind or otherwise. I did not have a sequel planned, as this was supposed to be stand-alone. The one reader above seems to have forgotten that this is a STORY!
My story as a teen
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metcalpa
metcalpa
Now that you see your story in print, I think that you realize that your writing skillls need a lot of work. As it is, it is almost unreadable.
Tawny, Daddy's Little Girl Becomes a Woman Ch 4
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Powerone
Powerone
I find the content brutal, and apparently others suggest you plagiarized the story, at least in part. The absence of spacing and paragraphs turned this into a wall of print, too hard to read.
Throwaway Child: A Love Story
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hillarysmuff
hillarysmuff
I wanted to let you know how much I enjoyed this story.