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LucOuarm Member Since October 19, 2009
Incest with my dad-True
LucOuarm 5573 days ago
- 4 + Really, you should start this story all over again instead of following parts. I can see what you have to say but with the poor spelling and grammar and huge disorganization, your story has trouble getting through.
Underground Home Alone
LucOuarm 5573 days ago
- 2 + One paragraph and short too. You need to put some more effort into this.
First Encounter
LucOuarm 5573 days ago
- 0 + Nice idea, but wasted because you did not develop it very far. Twice as long would still have been too short. Also check the spelling better.
The Arcade
LucOuarm 5573 days ago
- 10 + I haven't seen this plot before, and it is well-written too.
my little whore 2
LucOuarm 5573 days ago
- 0 + Each to their own.
Tessa'a Jungle Adventure
LucOuarm 5573 days ago
- 10 + I gave up on this wall of words because of the lack of spacing. Too bad you turned off a reader.