writermike
Member Since October 19, 2009
getting fucked at night
by
watchout
watchout
No plot at all no details describing the action taking place other than a dick being stuffed into an ass
this was a total waiste of time for the person posting this crap as well as the one stumbling on it.
It is obvious that you are not interested in wr
this was a total waiste of time for the person posting this crap as well as the one stumbling on it.
It is obvious that you are not interested in wr
Making Daddy Feel Good
by
phil05
phil05
you got good compliments from people yes but I think you should learn to write or find a differant pass time.
the readability was hard at best paragraphs help with that.
And what who are they what do they like and certainly maybe a little more or a lot
the readability was hard at best paragraphs help with that.
And what who are they what do they like and certainly maybe a little more or a lot
Dana and Nick's special sex
by
misstrouble
misstrouble
first of all anything short of 6 pages is a short letter on a story.
you should at least use spell check before posting.
Italics is prefered when emphasizing another persons speach or more acurately quotation marks and exclamation marks and especialy pa
you should at least use spell check before posting.
Italics is prefered when emphasizing another persons speach or more acurately quotation marks and exclamation marks and especialy pa
THE DAY I Dide it
by
hotdog49
hotdog49
you need spelling lessons first then you need writing lessons crap a block of writing is so hard to read to start with and you didn't even spell or write that good
Strange questions
by
Devilstale
Devilstale
leanr to write or get another hobby the other coment by dee mac well he may have liked your story but it would have been a much better story if you had taken into account " THE READER " and used paragraphs and propper sentence structure.
Cady's Story (The Beginning)
by
Lucious_Princess
Lucious_Princess
find something else to do with your time and make room for a few much better writers
Kissing Cousins
by
Honey Ryder
Honey Ryder
if you want some one to read your stories you should make them easy to read jumbling up the dialogu might make it easier for you to write the story but takes all the fun out of reading it.
get a copy of strunk and wagners english hand book
or the little
get a copy of strunk and wagners english hand book
or the little
TO KNOW BETTER BUT TO DO BAD
by
Tam Daniels
Tam Daniels
One page isn't even a good letter much less a story. You had a fair start but hardly worth the effort. I suppose we should be glad you used proper english
Mistress Nikki
by
submax
submax
find a new hobby or learn to write or make room for people that won't other people to read their work because youres really really sucks
MICHELLE & SALLY
by
Jolly1
Jolly1
I wish you would use good writing and proper english or find a differant hobby
Chloe's First Time
by
Naughty_Bear123
Naughty_Bear123
You gave a bad name to writers of gay female stories. Are you sure you really wanted to write a story
Mistress Nikki Part 1
by
submax
submax
since there are no reviews I thought I would say that you might have writing skill but you have tearible writing etequet so that is why I think your story suck dead dicks
All Alone In The Country Home - ( PART ONE )
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Thy SEXtremist
Thy SEXtremist
not just part of it or how it was written but the whole story sucked big time find a differan hobby
jess and liam
by
eggycheese
eggycheese
stop using single letter short cuts this isn't an e-mail thing.
U know is fine for e-mail even see you @ the store is nice but not in a story
U know is fine for e-mail even see you @ the store is nice but not in a story
Sex words
by
djcdorai
djcdorai
did you really want to write a story you should have posted that peep in the poems or better yet find a different pass time
Ms Cole
by
alan121
alan121
This story was bearly a letter. tha charactors had little life if any at all.
While granted it was your first attempt at story telling you should reflect on what you yourself would want to read and what makes you hot when it cums to reading about sex I a
While granted it was your first attempt at story telling you should reflect on what you yourself would want to read and what makes you hot when it cums to reading about sex I a
Decorating with Uncle
by
Leo P
Leo P
you should find somthing else to do with your spare time or learn how to write.
you have very poor writing skills as far as understanding how to write
Your skills of expressing your imagining is are less than your skills of writing.
you have very poor writing skills as far as understanding how to write
Your skills of expressing your imagining is are less than your skills of writing.
Decorating with Uncle
by
Leo P
Leo P
find something else to do with your time. you have no ability to write
Big Bro Takes Control 2
by
TheUsedGirl1201
TheUsedGirl1201
First of all did you really want to write a story that some else was going to read
Second I did not see any talent for writing so maybe you should make room for people that want to write and have their stories read
Third you should read a few books on
Second I did not see any talent for writing so maybe you should make room for people that want to write and have their stories read
Third you should read a few books on
Daddy's Little Girl Grows Up Fast
by
g_goyal2000
g_goyal2000
if you are goint to post someone else's work you should at least go through and clean up the pooooor gramer
Rooster
by
bethy
bethy
I think you can if you just could like the little choo-choo try a little harder.
If you think that that is too much to ask for you should find another pass time
If you think that that is too much to ask for you should find another pass time
The Temptation of Tanya
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StarSapphire
StarSapphire
find a differant pass time or learn how to write and use proper writing protocol. A writer has a responcibilty to the reader and that is to post a story that is easy to read. I didn't even read youres because it was sooo poorly writen
The Forest pt. 1
by
writermike
writermike
I am trying to work with the site master on the typos I didn't put them there
I will read it but it would be better with paragraphs