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random1739 Member Since October 19, 2009
Me and sis
random1739 5543 days ago
- 9 + Some better grammar (e.g. She says so and moves closer to me > "So?" she said and proceeded to move closer to me)

Tad more detail too, particularly between the asleep/awake part
Mom and her Father
random1739 5543 days ago
- 10 + Interesting story. Very rarely does one encompass a whole persons life like this, and how all the events affected so many peoples lives. It took guts to be able to share, and there is a mixed bag of emotions that this story expresses.

If there are any
Sex With a Star's Daughter
random1739 5543 days ago
- 9 + Good story, well written. Could use some paragraphs though.

I'd certainly like to see a Part 2
The Start of a Beautiful Friendship
random1739 5543 days ago
- 10 + Great story, very well written and good punctuation. Full marks from me :)

Hope to see more
I Found A Daughter I Never Knew Existed
random1739 5543 days ago
- 10 + I really don't know how to best describe it. It's an incredible story, presents a very challenging and conflict-filled situation.

Outstandingly written

Being who I am, I probably would have found some way (eventually) of telling the daughter the tru
Please Mom
random1739 5543 days ago
- 9 + I thought it was a great story. If anything, it could have been slightly longer, bit more of a lead up into her changing her mind and the events in the room.

Looking forward to more
TAK
random1739 5543 days ago
- 10 + Fantastic! One of the best stories I've ever read. Very well written, I would love to see more :D