User purvversion | Commented | Sex Stories Post

Emma's First. The Teasing Girl Gets It. by

JayEmDizzle 5071 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 0 + If you want honest feedback that could be helpful, you shouldnâ€™t be saying, â€œIâ€™ll only continue to write stories if each of my stories gets good feedback.â€ Iâ€™ll gently say your writing shows promise that will go wasted without true criticism suc

The Visit by

ChomZ 5071 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 0 + I just don't get first person stories. If you did all those things to me, why are you telling me? Don't I remember?

Travel Companion by

Mbop 5071 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 0 + Even though it's not 'my' type of story, I can still appreciate the writing, and I'd like to congratulate the author on writing something so well that I feel that no matter what one's taste in erotica might be, this should be enjoyable. For mother/son sto

I Swear I Locked the Door! by

teeman2000 5257 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 0 + It's so rare to see a well written story here at this site, I can only hope you continue. For criticism, I would offer that you put future endeavors into paragraphs. Still this is definitely an 'A' short story.

I Swear I Locked the Door! by

teeman2000 5257 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 5 + Suggest you look at Stories Online site (that's .net by the way) a much superior site. BTW, if you want reader contact, you might put your email at the end of each story. I can be contacted at yahoo. That's preceded by purvvauthor@.

My sister was told she was a lousy fuck. by

davidj 5264 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 0 + I'm guessing that the site itself suddenly has a problem with paragraphs. I see that some author's stories are okay. Suggest you contact one of them such as Anthony Dennis to see what he does different from you in submitting stories. His paragraphs stay.

Young Leslie by

Deadhead63 5275 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 2 + The story has less than 1500 words and in the first half alone, I these and other misspellings stood out like a sore thumb.

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Traveling with Angelique by

valsprofeet 5315 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 0 + What with this and your other story "Mom Competes With Dad" it's obvious that this site had a great new writer. Please keep it up. There are too few that write well.

A New Life, Part 1 by

mkirros 5537 days ago

purvversion 5542 days ago

- 5 + Very few writers here on this site take pride in their writing. mkirros is obviously one of the exceptions. Check out his other stories.

Note to the author... check out storiesonline(dot)net and consider posting there too.

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