prymA
Member Since October 19, 2009
Love My Sister
by
Jim Moore
5071 days ago
prymA
5542 days ago
Jim Moore
5071 days ago
prymA
5542 days ago
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this story was pooly written, there was no suspense and i could barly understand some of the sentences. this site is for those who want to maybe dabble in the erotic writing art form. you just ruined it. take some writting class's and english class's befo
Maria's Cumming Out
by
Youngstuff
Youngstuff
i gave this story a 3 because of the grammer and puncuation...you had great spacing and it was easily read.the story line in one of pure genious and it should continue.i say the training in bed should be that of tender love and lust at the same time.thats
Kimmie gets to cheer
by
tokamak
tokamak
this is a wonderful start...in the 2nd part please add the friend in some lesbian action than get the farther with both of them....wonderful story i would enjoy readin the 2nd part
Raven's tale
by
Pharoah
Pharoah
i have to say this is a nice intro to what it looks like a good story. you do how ever need to work on your plorals and your text. the wording was good, but the size of the letters you used could be lowered a little. you characters are a little far fetche
Maria's Cumming Out II
by
Youngstuff
Youngstuff
i just wanted to say this story was good...and peter and ben both have a point...but lets try not to argue over it....now the thing about maria's name all the time needs to stop seriously...it gets annoying..but other than that it was a good story and i e
A Night To Remember
by
Gwystyl
Gwystyl
just so you know, part 2 should not be shorter nor longer...you should build more suspense doing the sex scenes in part 2...just my advice
My Daughter Kelly
by
Trap
Trap
good have had better spelling but all in all it was a very well writen story....keep it up