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powermac81 Member Since October 19, 2009
A Sons Touch
powermac81 5543 days ago
- 8 + watch the unnecessary use of exclamation marks
Poker Dare With My Sister
powermac81 5543 days ago
- 1 + I quit reading due to poor grammar and spelling. Also, next time break up the story into paragraphs.
My life with uncle-pt 14
powermac81 5543 days ago
- 4 + I think you are a very good writer. People should read your stories before trying their own, many people could learn something from you. My only complaint is that you are taking so long to tell the story.
two in a bed?
powermac81 5543 days ago
- 1 + Have you ever heard of spell check? Also please do not write the way that you speak, try to use proper English. Also, next time, slow down, plan things out, and take your time.
walking in on my sister
powermac81 5543 days ago
- 2 + it was hard to follow due to the poor spelling, grammar, and lack of dialog. you need to work on grammar and spelling and try to slow down. it seemed like you rushed the story