kisses_of_vodka
Member Since October 19, 2009
Amateur Glamour Model
by
Jolly1
5349 days ago
kisses_of_vodka
5573 days ago
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4
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It was an alright story, but very hard to read. You had such an amazing cast of characters to deal with, but you failed to develop them. It turned into an unrealistic fantasy because you didn't work with the details, and use proper grammatical structure.