kazmak
Member Since October 19, 2009
Dana and Nick's special sex
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misstrouble
5071 days ago
kazmak
5542 days ago
misstrouble
5071 days ago
kazmak
5542 days ago
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Badly written, typeset badly, no build up, don't bother with Chapter 2
A Daddy's Dream Pt.1
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?????
?????
Go learn to write properly and learn about paragraphs - then someone might read it. Story content all over the place.
Dad and his frinds raped me
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Sun Chips
Sun Chips
Barely readable - don't publish anything until you learn how to write. Heard of capital letters and spellcheck????
My Friend Chuck
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geoful
geoful
Capital letters. paragraphs???? Don't you want anyone to read your story? At the moment it is impossible to get past the second line.
The day I found out I was double jointed
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davidj
davidj
I cannot believe the number of people attempting to write here cannot even put a sentence together, use capital letters or punctuation - don't they want people to read their work? Then to top it off by giving themselves top votes....hahahahahaha........g
MY BEST FRIEND AND HIS GIRL
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handy69
handy69
Gave up trying to read this - how about not writing in capital letters for a
The Wild Hunt Part 1
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Horns & Hooves
Horns & Hooves
A great change to the usual rubbish on this site - Dont keep us waiting too long for more. Thank you.
two in a bed?
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lil_vicki
lil_vicki
Because obviously you haven't read your story since writing it. The grammar is bad, spelling woeful. A waste of a reasonable idea.
Raven's tale
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Pharoah
Pharoah
It is very important to proof read your work - there is nothing more annoying to me than bad spelling, punctuation and grammar. Do you see it in novels or other books? No. Write your stories as if they are going to be in a book and see the difference.
Me and My Sister
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junior30
junior30
The story has potential, proff read it and be careful not to be repetitive.
TABOO
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ashish
ashish
If you take some of the suggestions from Etoile and tboneguy when you continue this story it should be a good read.
seducing daddy
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KTD69
KTD69
Spelling grammar and puncutation seem to have been forgotten - prrof read everything before submitting it
Triplets – Co-ed Home Tuition
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Gehenna
Gehenna
At last a rare treat - someone who can write!! Hot story - I hope you can continue this theme
Rooster
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bethy
bethy
If you want someone to read your story - space it, punctuate it and at least spell check it. It's such hard going as you have posted no-one would want to go through another chapter the same.
Shocked By Daughter
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Gr8FullDad
Gr8FullDad
Seems to be normal on this site - no one can spell or put a logical sentence together. If you want someone to read you stuff - write it properly.