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jayloves69a Member Since October 19, 2009
Father's Diary
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 6 + Well i first noticed this mistake "I am so poor that I can’t afford to buy her any beautiful clothing" its a mistake because you said earlier in it

"I am a 43 year-old constructor. Clever, handsome, rich" anyway good story hoping for more :p
Me & Kelsey
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 0 + no build up or climax bad story!!!
Eleanor's descent chptr 03
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 8 + very good keep it up
When Kin have to move in with Kin
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 4 + Looks like alot of work went into it, story line isn't the best and you swear way to much in a story kinda puts you off reading IMO.
Brother & Sister: Part 2
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 0 + great story hoping for the next :)
Brother & Sister: Part 2
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 10 + lol they shud make the darker colour the real star ffs
My Turn (Pt. 1)
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 10 + Great story hope to see the next installment, but yeah drew is right it needs more realism but great story non the less
Fun in the family
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 10 + more please awesome story
My friends bro and his gf
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 10 + its ok needs to be longer though
I'm in control
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 0 + Great story a little bad spelling here and there but all in all great story can't wait for the nexy installment :)
I'm in control
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 10 + Great story a little bad spelling here and there but all in all great story can't wait for the nexy installment :)
Just 1 Crazy night ill remember
jayloves69a 5542 days ago
- 6 + My grammer is good and so is by spelling mate, and i am writing another chapter billyleeblack and that'll have ur erotica in it lol