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The Hotel Manager and his adventures with teens by velvetdays 4977 days ago
infernodante 5449 days ago
- 8 + Good start.

A couple things need improvement.

1. Paragraphs and punctuation. When things are run-on sentances it is hard to read. When there is 125 lines of text with no paragraph breaks it also makes things hard to read. It also means you migh
Summer sleepover by Kolobe 4977 days ago
infernodante 5449 days ago
- 10 + It has just enough of everything you want. Amazing.