goofydude
Member Since October 19, 2009
Stepmom & Me, first storyyy. so plzz have mercy while rating
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The Steantorian
5071 days ago
goofydude
5542 days ago
The Steantorian
5071 days ago
goofydude
5542 days ago
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I will try to be nice, but one paragraph, is not a story. If there is a minimum i would say 4, and you can break that story up, 1st paragraph-main character(s) info 2nd-Events leading up (or plotting) 3rd-sex (with details, like how it feels, sounds, a
My Sis Obsession
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liam1090
liam1090
there was no eroticism, unless you are of course 10, you may find that kinda sexy. the grammar and spelling: total shit, story line: even worse than the grammar and spelling
How my life got fucked over by my (former) best friend
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micky993
micky993
ill give you a mid-rating, it seems there is obviously more, but something went wrong and cut it off... if thats not the case... this story has to be the worst one ive ever read.
MY BEST FRIEND AND HIS GIRL
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handy69
handy69
its all caps, hurt my eyes, i couldnt even read past half way.
its all one paragraph.
please, listen to what your english teacher tells you.
its all one paragraph.
please, listen to what your english teacher tells you.
Ms Cole
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alan121
alan121
ill give you a 1... because of the last story i read, it made this one not seem too bad. i guess i can give you a beginning... but there was almost no eroticism...
but you had me laughing at the end...
but you had me laughing at the end...
carolyn's hot boyfriend
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ilovecarolyn
ilovecarolyn
i think this is a joke... no fucking way hes serious.
but im laughing.
but im laughing.
The Three gals and myself.
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Juicyiceman
Juicyiceman
i thought it was a decent story, but i have a problem with the word "cummed," i think it should be "came," but then again i could just be saying it wrong.
Alone with Jessica
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brentoes
brentoes
you did decent, but put spacing (double preferred) after periods.
make it more descriptive. other errors i didnt really notice.
make it more descriptive. other errors i didnt really notice.
Making Out With Mom
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Chunks
Chunks
keep this story going fool! top notch writing, great grammar, spelling, punct... and most importantly story!
if there is no part 2 i will be very disappointed
(hmm i think my real account was deleted or something i dunno...)
if there is no part 2 i will be very disappointed
(hmm i think my real account was deleted or something i dunno...)
Nice Party II
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lovr
lovr
good read, this one was slightly disappointing from the length, but still quite good. like what he said, ill watch for the next one.