genericmanca
Member Since October 22, 2011
a day in the park
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Trentoncook3
4884 days ago
genericmanca
4810 days ago
Trentoncook3
4884 days ago
genericmanca
4810 days ago
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This is just one long run on sentence. I would suggest that you not write anything else until you have learned some basic grammar. The poor grammar detracts from what has the potential to be an interesting story. I agree with Morgen and reaney.
A Daughter Steps In
by
hrnydadinnc
hrnydadinnc
Apart from a few minor grammatical/spelling errors, this is an excellent story. It flows smoothly and logically. Well done!