domain82
Member Since October 19, 2009
Encounter I Knew Would Happen
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Stevecale
5187 days ago
domain82
5659 days ago
Stevecale
5187 days ago
domain82
5659 days ago
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Why do you bother writing these stories, when all your going to get is negative feedback about "NO PARAGRAPHS".
house rules part 2
by
jeffal
jeffal
Bit rushed towards the end but a well constructed story. Spelling and punctuation needs work.
Emma discovers a new side
by
yfsalope
yfsalope
Pretty good stort but watch the changes in details. You tell us he drives a Porsche, it's one of the first things you put but then he drive a Ferrari. He maybe wealthy but becareful with your details
Virgin Girl Scout Ripe to Eat
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Brigit Astar
Brigit Astar
Am I thick or has this story been submitted several times before, without any editing of any sort
Virgin Girl Scout Ripe to Eat
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Brigit Astar
Brigit Astar
This story is getting extremely repetetive, I'm sure it's been submitted a couple of times before, without any editting. How about something new.
best mate fucked
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tomqaz1
tomqaz1
One star was the lowest I could give. What I really wanted to give was nothing.
The punctuation was crap. No full stops, commas or paragraphs. And the spelling was diabolical. Try again.
The punctuation was crap. No full stops, commas or paragraphs. And the spelling was diabolical. Try again.
Roleplaying Babysitter
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Couple_Surrey
Couple_Surrey
This story seemed very short to me and I was having some trouble getting into it. Perhaps you could try lengthening it.
Fucking another girl we babtsat.
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Anne48
Anne48
We have John, Cheryl and Victoria. We also have Sarah and Laurie. Why is your tag title: Beautiful Rebecca?
Their First Time, pt1
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Nishi
Nishi
Good story but i thought it was about two people Akasa and John. Suddenly Josh appeared. You need to keep an eye on the character details. For instance, one minute John is 7" long, the next he's only 6" long.
FINALLY!!! I HAN MY COUSIN FOR BREAKFAST
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traits_tres
traits_tres
Try writing in understandable English, your ratings will improve
FINALLY!!! I HAD MY COUSIN FOR BREAKFAST
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traits_tres
traits_tres
Well done, you've re-posted it but unfortunately, the spelling is still crap. If you were texting this message to a teenager, perhaps they could decipher it. Please try again
Best B-day Present I Could Get
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Wormmel
Wormmel
Story, punctuation and content of this syory definately need reworking and resubmitting.
Teenage Fantasies 4
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marriedslut51
marriedslut51
I fantasies 1, 2 and 3 the spelling went a bit off track, but in fantasy 4 the spelling mistakes were to say the least, atrocious
Pleasure at Sundown
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Guy223
Guy223
Dave, were you reading the same story as I was. I didn't read that Michael had a 13" cock. 7.5" was how it was described.
My sister was told she was a lousy fuck.
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davidj
davidj
What more can I say. Has anyone ever heard of PARAGRAPHS. Reading this becomes really tiresome without them.
My best friend Ben 3
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Kellyy
Kellyy
Really enjoyed Pt1 and Pt3, but unfortunately Pt2 is nowhere to be found. Perhaps you could resubmit it again for our entertainment
impregnated by a black men
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james100
james100
Have you never thought of using your @Spell Check@. It stops you from looking completely illiterate,
impregnated by a black men
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james100
james100
Have you never thought of using your 'Spell Check'. It stops you from looking completely illiterate,