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darklioness Member Since October 19, 2009
The making of a critical heir Part 2
darklioness 5542 days ago
- 9 + The second story was even better than the first. It got me hot and wet. I loved it!
Trish's Story 1
darklioness 5542 days ago
- 8 + Loved the story but the ending wasn't developed enough. Please write some more!
The making of a critical heir
darklioness 5542 days ago
- 7 + This story was well written and well developed. I would have liked to have read about more interaction between Paula and her husband once he heard about her encounters. Keep up the good work. I'll be looking for more from you.
Tessa'a Jungle Adventure
darklioness 5542 days ago
- 8 + Good first attempt, but please break up your stories into paragraphs. It makes for an easier read. Keep up the good work. Am looking forward to part 2.