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cynicbitch21 Member Since October 19, 2009

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Ashlee Simpson's McDonald's Experience by

AlleyKat123 5071 days ago

cynicbitch21 5543 days ago

- 0 + Pretty bad really. I stopped reading around the time the guys joined her in the bathroom and then just skimmed through the rest.

Pretty boring really.

The conversations among characters didn't flow very naturally.

And this is just a horrible way to wr

Finally, she's mine... by

Shun 5071 days ago

cynicbitch21 5543 days ago

- 0 + I'm so sick of people with poor English skills writing these stories. This was terrible. Half of your sentences didn't even make sense. "...revealing her medium sized breasts cupped by a gorgeous pair of pink bra." "Well, and out of my desire too." "It wa

My Girlfriends Daughter by

paul1254 5492 days ago

cynicbitch21 5543 days ago

- 0 + Do you know what these are: " " ??

...USE THEM! I gave up on your story because of the terrible punctuation.

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