curious_one
Member Since September 12, 2010
David & Susan's After School Education
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kevinw5766
5110 days ago
curious_one
5108 days ago
kevinw5766
5110 days ago
curious_one
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What a great story! Thank you for sharing it with us.
My Young Tutor
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hillarysmuff
hillarysmuff
Your stories are wonderful. They have a special quality of tenderness that so many others lack. Keep up the great work!
Hymen Snap (Chapter Three)
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briandormand
briandormand
More, please. Chapter two was a bit discordant but we're back on track. How about a little more detail? I'm having a tough time visualizing Becca. What is she wearing? Cute and blond takes us only so far. When he touches her, does she shiver? Has she goosebumps? When Becca leaves, he can't resist smelling her hair and neck. Has she shampoo'd recently, leaving the fresh clean-washed smell? Is she wearing any scent? Or, heaven forbid, has she been cutting onions or passing gas? The fun is in the details!
When her sister was spying.
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spookyvampire01
spookyvampire01
So far, so good, although I' m wondering if little sis is Erika or Emily. Slow down a bit and give us a few more descriptive details to put us into the scene. Let the details come out naturally. Instead of saying she had 38D tits (like almost everyone else does) , it's better to describe how they stretch the fabric of her shirt and the wonderful way they sway as she moves. We'll know they're melons! And, to answer your question, yes, of course you should continue! This is a credible first effort. Thanks for writing.
I didn't expect to lose it (long, first time)
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Dgan
Dgan
Damn, what a story! Yes, it was long, but every word was a jewel. The setting, with the thunder accompaniment , was brilliant. You are a giant among men.. or.. a giantess among women.. or something. Thank you, and please keep writing! A very appreciative audience is depending on you.