LordSnow
Member Since October 19, 2009
A SlutsTale (part one- how i became a slut)
by
jeffal
5523 days ago
LordSnow
5556 days ago
jeffal
5523 days ago
LordSnow
5556 days ago
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definately a first attempt... spell check would be my first piece of advice. thought things happened way to fast.. have to agree wasn't too original but keep writing you'll get bettr in time
Fantasies
by
oldbondsie
oldbondsie
your writing is about 2 steps away from being a wall of words, when each character speaks it is a seperate paragraph, like this
"Mom I can't sleep there’s to much thunder," Micheal said
Jackie knew he was afraid of thunder and felt so bad for him.
"Mom I can't sleep there’s to much thunder," Micheal said
Jackie knew he was afraid of thunder and felt so bad for him.