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Great idea, but here's a few thoughts to make it a really great story:
It ends pretty abruptly. Good buildup (I'd have made it about ten times longer, but then again I like really long, developed stories), but the actual sex only lasted a paragraph, a
It ends pretty abruptly. Good buildup (I'd have made it about ten times longer, but then again I like really long, developed stories), but the actual sex only lasted a paragraph, a