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TheSophist Member Since October 19, 2009
summer school is so much fun!!
TheSophist 5543 days ago
- 3 + Great idea, but here's a few thoughts to make it a really great story:

It ends pretty abruptly. Good buildup (I'd have made it about ten times longer, but then again I like really long, developed stories), but the actual sex only lasted a paragraph, a