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Sarah's Early Training by RedHeadLover 5304 days ago
Rum 5650 days ago
- 3 + This is a good story but it seems too matter of fact. develop the story, don't just make it a narrative. It will "play" better if it's a true story not a narrative. INHO this could be SO fuckin' hot if you tell a story not just relate what happened.