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RandomScribbles Member Since November 29, 2009
3 Rivers Kennels and Horse farm by Clae 5530 days ago
RandomScribbles 5514 days ago
- 0 + I enjoyed the story, it was pretty good for a first one. But one thing you could do to improve would be to try to work the whole introduction into the story itself. Instead of explaining it all in the beginning, work bits and parts of it into the story.