Panzerkpf1
Member Since October 19, 2009
our first time together
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zachjoas
5071 days ago
Panzerkpf1
5543 days ago
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The story is alright, but it has some spelling and grammar errors that need fixing. Some dialog would held the story, too.
To Take a Thief - Chapter III
The forced sex is starting to seem out of place. I can understand why he did it in the first story, she broke into his house. But now they are lovers, and she doesn't appear to have a submissive personality. Evidence of this is when she gets pissed off at
To Take a Thief - Chapter 2
The only thing I don't like about this story is that the chick won't be living with him, I kind of expected that from the end of the first story. Other than that, loved every word.