OMO
Member Since October 19, 2009
My first week with my slut sister.
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dmmac44
5071 days ago
OMO
5543 days ago
dmmac44
5071 days ago
OMO
5543 days ago
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Like the story, you could use more paragraph breaks. I have found writing my own story its sometimes hard to realize that as you have the story in your mind while you are writting it and it make perfect sence to you. Overall I like the story
Tasting Candi
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KaiKenobi
KaiKenobi
Like the story, needs some more proof reading and its a little confussing to read but I ubnderstand sometime hard to put in words what your mind wants to say, I hope you write chapter two. Good first try