
MzDeviancy
Member Since October 19, 2009
Me and my Brother
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WTFISUP2424
5134 days ago
MzDeviancy
5606 days ago


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You need to separate your sentences -especially in the last paragraph-, work on capitalization, and punctuation. My editor's a perfectionist nutcase, but it makes you better. If you're old enough, you should try going on Literotica and checking out the vo