MkUScream4Me
Member Since December 22, 2009
Camping Trip
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wolfgoddess25
5351 days ago
MkUScream4Me
5350 days ago
wolfgoddess25
5351 days ago
MkUScream4Me
5350 days ago
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WOW!!!!! What an amazing piece of erotica! It was so good, I printed it out for my wife to read, and we both had to stop several times to fuck during the story! You have a talented pen, and I would love to see more from this storyline, or others. I will be watching for your work! Keep up the hard work!
WOW! I love bars!
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princessniceass
princessniceass
Good storyline, but the pacing seems rushed. You spent a great deal of time building up the location and how you got there, but then hurried through the real point of the story (the foreplay and sex). Also, I recommend you get an editor to help you catch the little things before you submit your next story. Even a short story, if written with few to no errors, can still be extremely satisfying, especially to the author. Just my opinions, though, you did great for your first time LOL.
Hot Cream Shop
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brinorwood
brinorwood
Great story, loved the idea and the pace, but you really should do some proofreading before submitting. Lots of spelling errors making it hard to follow at times.