Lozier
Member Since October 19, 2009
Family Farm Fun!
by
XAshleyX
5101 days ago
Lozier
5573 days ago
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6
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I've read worse, but I've also read better, but how is this an animal story? There was a tiny instance of animal sex and thats it.
Britney and the Beast
Much better than a lot I've read recently though personally I prefer something a bit longer it was a decently lengthed story. Good job.
One Day My Life Was Great
This is a decent idea turned into pure crap, if there was a rating less than one star you'd get it.
Time Turner Trouble part 2
it was good but too short
Snakes
write a sequel please very very good
Dominatrix Sister part 2
I loved the story, both parts. As for it not getting repetative, maybe have her take him out in public? Some little house party thrown by a classmate?
In my house
pretty good, couldve been better though
Slut Jackpot
dry humping does not constitute a sex story, and it certainly doesnt belong in group
Cousins at the gym
just crap plain and simple
Getting back at Nadia pt 2
damnit, it did it to my paragraphs again
Teacher teach so meany things!
It's a strong concept ruined by a weak author. You misspelled words, skipped words, structured paragraphs poorly, and basically did everything else wrong. Next time write it in a program that has spell check, I'd suggest the latest release of word, that w
Me and Mah Sisters
It was a good premise and I would like to hear more but it went way too fast and was way too short.
Horny Sister
This story is a bit cliche, but a good read nonetheless. You could have made it better with some detail, eye and hair color, various sizes, height weight etc. Your paragraph issues weren't anything major enough to dissuade the average person just wanting
Make Me Into an Anal Whore, Daddy!
This was good, but in an easy way. Like hunting with a grenade. You get the kill, but there's no finesse, no skill needed. Your writing should be a delicate piece of art and it just isn't.
Camryn: C05
your story took a disturbing twist in this chapter ....bad move.
After the party
You should work on your grammar, and maybe lengthen it a bit. Great premise but poorly executed.
Big Sis, Little Sis
Another wasted concept on an author who doesn't know how to make something last. You need to make it longer, everything else was great.
My sister's friend
i could literally crap out a better story. it was too short, to fast, there were no details, no nothing
a night at the Vet - pt 3
These are very good I can't wait for part 4. Maybe one of them fucks her ass?
Schoolgirl
it was nice but you went a little fast
My First Babysitting Job
It was a good idea, but you ended it way too fast. Longer is better. You also need to work on paragraph structure...and actually having paragraphs....
Vacatition with my daughter
Very very good if more people on this site wrote like this all the others would have to shut down from no activity.
Taking story down
Keep up the great work I look forward to seeing more after the slew of trash from other authors recently.
Teaching Lydia
Usually I can find something to complain about with every story, but the only thing wrong with this was that it was just too short.
Dominatrix Sister part 3
These are getting better and better. Keep writing.