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Stranded at sea with mom. part1 by mind_warrior_2000 4920 days ago
Lazerous 4919 days ago
- 0 + This is a great chapter! Word of advice: you do have some grammar mistakes and try to make shorter paragraphs. So however many paragraphs you have now, if you double that, it would actually be a lot better!
The Audrey Blake Experience by Thetruth723 5134 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 8 + great story could use a better ending though.....
Michelle. Big and sexy by Duo-B 5134 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 5 + wonderful story, wish it was a little bit longer or if you would write a sequel!
Mia Suocera - My Mother-in-Law Ch. 01 by nevada 5134 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 10 + how do we understand this?
An Encounter with Janice by billperkins 5134 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 10 + great story but wheres the picture?
To Take a Thief - Chapter III by tiberius61 5134 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 5 + man....i want my own cuban maid.......
Sleep`n with mom6 by luckyson 5134 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 4 + Not even a break between sentences! You have a big spacing problem among others.
Texas by dexterndidi 5134 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 6 + Punctuation rules need a review and try to put a bit more content and make each section LONGER!
Ms Erikson's cock by bizkit 5253 days ago
Lazerous 5252 days ago
- 0 + hope you write more
She Hulk goes wild by fanficnut 5397 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 7 + Story is pretty good, try ending it a little better. You were doing good for the beginning and middle of the story but it seems that the ending was kind of rushed.
To Take a Thief - Chapter 2 by tiberius61 5520 days ago
Lazerous 5606 days ago
- 5 + Wonderful addition to the last chapter.
Aunt Serene (My Best Friends Mum) by susansloverboy 5544 days ago
Lazerous 5544 days ago
- 0 + great story! good to see you back!