HarleyBuff
Member Since October 19, 2009
Mother's Milk
by
NightmarePrincess
5070 days ago
HarleyBuff
5542 days ago
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10
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I liked it as it sounds like most did....except for the exceptionally tasteless few. This story possessed feeling and good taste (at least as much good taste as you can get when writing about incest). I enjoyed it and my dick got hard.....that's the bes
Boy's first time
The content of the story was really good. Good enough to get my cock hard, so you accomplished your goal. The only criticism I would have is for you to paragraphs and structure your story out. Other than that, good job.
The BIG Game
Good content but you need to work on your grammer. There are no paragraphs nor quotes which makes it a little bit harder to follow.......but I liked the story.
It excited her....
Sometimes it's good to leave the reader hanging, but you have to have a good tease to pull it off successfully.....
This story was just getting off the ground and then it stopped. I'm sorry, I just felt like there was so much more potential in the sto
This story was just getting off the ground and then it stopped. I'm sorry, I just felt like there was so much more potential in the sto
I fucked my stepson
This may have actually been a good story, but I never got past the first line. When I saw the box of words underneath I just said "forget it". I don't understand these people. It's so fucking easy and it just makes the story SO MUCH BETTER AND EASIE
sex awareness week
In paragraph 1 it says... "one of the only guys who I haven’t fucked". In paragraph 4 it says “holy shit†he whispered “ you’re a virginâ€. Other than that, it was pretty good.
painful pleasure
Well. What can I say. The premise of the story was good, but the presentation left a little to be desired. I don't think I saw a single sentence beginning with a capital letter. There were WAY too many .......'s. It appeared to be just one long se
Best friends mom
OK, sorry about the rating but this was awful. It was pretty obvious it was your first time, but don't be discouraged. There are a LOT of misspelled words. Sentences are fragmented and some run-on. Also, break it down into paragraphs. This shouldn
The Stepmother
Starts out great, but ends up being just a teaser. If you're not planning to finish it, then don't post it at all.
Helping out at the bar Part 1
Awsome story. Can't wait for the sequel. Keep it cumming.........I am.
When I was raped
The story itself was ok, but this was just a huge block of text. Didn't even make it though half of it because of the terrible formatting.
Becoming Rich - Part 2
Good story. In fact, that is what is so good about it. It has an actual story. I'm very much looking forward to the rest of it.
1 Husband + 3 of His Bestfriends = Gangbang on Wife
Is it just me or did I read into that that their son had just died and they had been to the funeral home that day for the viewing, then came home and he cheered her up by letting her fuck 3 of his friends?
I'm sorry, had it not been for that revelation
I'm sorry, had it not been for that revelation
Kidnapped
Oh, Gee. Another story with no paragraphs. And to add insult to injury, it has the gall to label it as "Chapter 1". Hopefully, there wasn't a "Chapter 2" embedded in there somewhere. Oh, and "Spellchecker" is a great tool and would have caught MANY
A train Rise to Remember part 2
Ok, you need to figure out from whose perspective you are writing this story. And when you go from one perspective to another, at the very least there should be a paragraph. My suggestion would be to have the same character tell the entire story, but th
New Forest - New position
Good story line. Next time though, proof read it before posting. Although there were some grammer issues, it didn't take away from the overall effect. Keep it up.
Purgatory Games
What a great story. Very original, I thought. Long, but interesting enough so that it left me wanting more afterwards. Can't wait to see what happens next. Maybe Tyrone enters the picture again.
Third Year of College
3rd year of college and a teacher and still can't write using paragraphs. Good story though.
A Tiger - By Any Other Name
Awesome story. Very professionally done. All bases covered. Nothing negative to say at all. Still waiting for my hardon to go down...........which tells you something right there.
Pool Fantasy
the story had potential but ...... there......was ...... never ......any .......break .......between......eny......of,......the......sentences........except.......for.......a.....few......periods........
Very difficult to read.
Very difficult to read.
MILF: A virgin's story
I agree. There is no story here. Some random fantasy that has a LONG way from becoming a "story".
Fucking my son best friends
Good thing the son went to college. It's pretty evident that mom didn't make it past 5th grade.
Daddys lil slut, part 1
Yes, agree. Good beginning. Looking forward to part 2.
How mom and I survived the cold without power.
Enjoyed the story. I'm going right away to read part 2. Hope it is as good.
Hostage at the Womens' Prison
Well, I for one liked it a lot. Well written. Good beginning. I like the way you set it up......explaining a bit of his past and how he ended up as a prison guard. Perhaps a bit of that would have been good for the "ladies" involved but certainly did not take away from the story. I'm going to put you on my "watch list". Looking forward to experiencing your future contributions.
My sister was told she was a lousy fuck.
I'm beginning to think (or maybe just hope) that you are correct and that there is an issue with the engine that imports the stories. I can't believe how many stories are coming across with no paragraphs at all. As many comments that have been posted
Jenny's Journey Home
I very much disagree with the first poster. I look forward to this authors postings. His stories are organized and, IMO well done. I like his writing style. When you compare this authors style to a majority of the writers here on this forum, he is
My cold bitch of a wife
Great premise for a story. A little hard to follow who was telling the story though. Statements like "Without answering, she bent over and put it in her mouth. I had to open very wide to get it in but then it hit the back of her mouth quickly." Other
A Sluts Tale (part 2-my dads co-workers)
It was hard to get through it. Some sentences so long the entire paragraph is one sentence. No capitalization, paragraphs not broken in the logical places. And the story sounds like the fantasy of a 12 year old. Totally unrealistic. "because my sh