
Edalzio
Member Since October 19, 2009
A Nurse Check-up Story.
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Mysticwonton
5134 days ago
Edalzio
5606 days ago


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It's good for a begginer, but it had no lead up, no suspence or explination. try to add a little more realism, it makes is more interesting that way
Teasing Sister
i was reading this in front of my brothers baby sitter, i wanted to grab her tits and blow all over her!
Beautifil
Exelent use of diction and a nice, almost poetic flow.
I Swear I Locked the Door!
not even going to try and read this until it has proper structuring, through a paragraph or two in.
Exposing little sister
Good stry one of my favorites in fact