Bronze189
Member Since October 19, 2009
Brown's shoe store I
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Slickman2000
5071 days ago
Bronze189
5542 days ago
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Without a doubt, the MOST in-depth, passionate, and well-written story I've ever seen on this site, or (pretty much) any other. You have a gift man. Only problem is that you didn't give very good body descriptions. I'm sure that with your talent, you c
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