
Barrak
Member Since October 19, 2009
Brotherly, Sisterly Love
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g_goyal2000
5581 days ago
Barrak
5580 days ago


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Nice story, you certainly have a gift for writing. However, in future please try to tone down the verbiage. You have an almost poetic way of writing which gave your story good flow & made for a great read. But you tended to get a bit wordy sometimes. Try to work on that. Good job. Keep them coming.