Almar
Member Since October 19, 2009
Friend turned butt buddy
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Zata09
5102 days ago
Almar
5573 days ago
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At least try to turn this into a proper story. use a Spell Checker next time and make sure you at least try to captivate the audience's attention.
My sister was told she was a lousy fuck.
The content may be good, but the lack of paragraphs and quotations makes it hard to read, some sentences don't quite flow as natural as they could and that is something you should focus on.
Tasha and I at the Gloryhole Party
Now this is what I would consider a good story. It's colourful, detailed, and of course, well written. Keep up the good work!