-Morph-
Member Since October 19, 2009
More Kitty Tales ( and Tails)
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Rodger-the-Dodger
Rodger-the-Dodger
i loved the here kitty kitty one you did before.. this one although good still lacked the finishing touches and symbolzm that your other one had
Here, Kitty, Kitty
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Rodger-the-Dodger
Rodger-the-Dodger
This is probably the best erotic story ive had the pleasure to read. Its not fitting to have it posted here with all the other "wank fics" this story was deeper.. it had more meaning... it was well written.
Its clearly novel quality and the comparison
Its clearly novel quality and the comparison
Bloody Mary
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Parsons
Parsons
blood isnt my thing but i can appreciate a well written story.. thd this is not a well written story.. it was just anothe r"wank fic" that bypassed all the plot ans story and setup just to get to the meaningless sex.
Try harder to actually think up a p
Try harder to actually think up a p
Making the Grade, Part One
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silence50k
silence50k
Predictable boring and hardly arousing... no plot no composition no rising or falling action.
Try harder next time to fill in some kind of story around the mindless fucking of a student and teacher.
Try harder next time to fill in some kind of story around the mindless fucking of a student and teacher.
Heretics (Chapter 5)
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NightmarePrincess
NightmarePrincess
It is pretty much a remake of the previous chapters... i mean the time that passed her pussy should be utterly unuseable ... no way could she survive all this. i was kinda bored.
your first chapter and second were the best.. but i dont feel its going a
your first chapter and second were the best.. but i dont feel its going a
The Punishment
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blueperfection
blueperfection
I sure hope you get better... FAST. but since it is your first time i wont be too harsh. try reading a good story form here and mimicing the buildups and plot and storyline so that yours isnt so "second person" that throws it all out fo whack... maybe if
The Bath
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Blazerr501
Blazerr501
it was an ok story not much of a plot pretty predictable and bland as far a origionality goes.
ot was ok.
ot was ok.
Confused!!!!!!!!
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flip
flip
i agree with both reviews.
it has a good idea but not well thought out at all.. try harder you have the potential.
it has a good idea but not well thought out at all.. try harder you have the potential.
How I Became a Web Cam Slut
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WMSpearshaker
WMSpearshaker
Forced unrealistic and boring.
i didnt even bother reading the rest... especiallyafter a girl who is usually conservative and dosent think too much about sex to be so bold.. even with a few glasses of wine in her would go to two 15 year old boys and
i didnt even bother reading the rest... especiallyafter a girl who is usually conservative and dosent think too much about sex to be so bold.. even with a few glasses of wine in her would go to two 15 year old boys and
Lilith
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Hotaruset
Hotaruset
it started out really well... the plot was interesting and enjoyable... then her lack of emotion and allowing him full access to her body made it kinda lame... and her actually liking being raped was a turn off especially since the story focused on her st
Spying Cousin Part 1
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Chim
Chim
There are so many things wrong with this shit im not going to go into it... since its yoru first story ill just say work on your paragraphing sentence structure and spelling youve got a LONG way to go to get any good... but if you keep at it you'll get th
Sibling Rivalry Ch 1
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21death12
21death12
It was boring, not believeable in the slightest, and just another "wank fic"
Try harder next time... you have some good potentials in there but the naivity of the doctor and the fact that he let everyone in the room to use the bathroom or what not is ju
Try harder next time... you have some good potentials in there but the naivity of the doctor and the fact that he let everyone in the room to use the bathroom or what not is ju
Christmas Carolers
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AkonMyrkez
AkonMyrkez
but watch yoruspelling and try to break up the giant paragraph into msaller easier to read ones... i enjoyed the plot it was a bit lacking on detail but it was still believeable... keep up the good work .. just work on a few things while youre at it.
Icy Hot
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Fly4aWhiteGuy
Fly4aWhiteGuy
its a good story but its one ive heard way too many times so although itsw ell written its too predictable... trysomething more origional next time.
Icy Hot
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Fly4aWhiteGuy
Fly4aWhiteGuy
actually i read it again and i realized its not that good at all.. its kindaboring and i found myself skipping paragraphs cause its so predictable.
War is Hell
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tinkertoy
tinkertoy
keep it up you'll only get better.
its a good story ... not that i believe it to be non fiction.
its a good story ... not that i believe it to be non fiction.
My Sister and Lisa - part 1
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Rob-ed01
Rob-ed01
Same shit .. different day. Im looking for something more origional or atleast realistic.
Living at girlfriends house part one
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jimbrck
jimbrck
not the best but good... ill read the second part when its out.
Babysitting Bobby
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Fyre
Fyre
its an interesting perspective and good storyline... out of the ordinary and so its captivating.
Keep up the good work.
maybe a little more on the sex parts.. and not just one minute she was tucking him in.. and the next shes blowing the kid...
Keep up the good work.
maybe a little more on the sex parts.. and not just one minute she was tucking him in.. and the next shes blowing the kid...
Hank Takes Revenge
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Fyre
Fyre
The first story about this was the ebst... the second continued the tale but didnt go anywhere in particular... this one was just plain rushed and boring... meaningless sex and no plot whatsoever. What a huge let down!
One Way Ticket To Hell
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Peter_Pan
Peter_Pan
Well in my travels around this archive of wannabe writers and purely "wank" ficsters, (as i like to call most of the artists around here who just skip the plot entirely and go straight to the fucking...) you sir are far beyond them in every way.
this sto
this sto
Two Cent Whore
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Peter_Pan
Peter_Pan
This was a good story I think... and I tried to read your harper valley stories but i get bored halfway in as they quickly become a jumble of names and random events that collide into a mass of confusion from my point of view... too many names and people
Two in One
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Bensid
Bensid
no plot no story no reason to even write this garbage...
please next time you write a story go read a great story first so you know how to properly set up a storyline.
please next time you write a story go read a great story first so you know how to properly set up a storyline.
Accidental Incest
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g_goyal2000
g_goyal2000
its boring and predictable. sure i got hard but i can get hard watching paint dry. its a good storyline that makes a SEX story great and this is not it.
Go away now. Take an englsh comp. 1 class then try again.