hatred

[kaidman]

sleep will not find me only pain
joy will not embrace only emptyness
the void is calling how long shall I hold on
my code broken as a love is hurt
please punish me my crime is absolute
I am tired but not fatigued
there is no point to reach
I am not a man I am a dog that bites
you carry hate that I don't feel
I am cold it feels so cold
when you hurt nothing else matters to me
the tears wont stop I feel tired your hope is like a light and I stopped reaching for you
I am dog that has been abandoned please let me suffer in your place
I hate myself

[Brigit Astar]

I like this poem for the anguish of it (boy, is that a masochistic statement). What I mean is the poem is partly about pain and anguish and you express it well. The only criticism I have is that in some places it would help to add a comma, as sometimes it causes confusion without some punctuation.

[kaidman]

sorry those emotions were 1oo% real when written so penmanship wasn't a priority

[jessy19]

Very strong emotions luv. *hugs* Beautifully written dark poem. Sadness, something we all experience and it helps to write about it.