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crzy67
01-09-2009, 08:55 PM
I know nothing rhymes but you may like it.

Together we wrap our bodies in a tangle like steel vipers in a death grip.
She slides me inside her as our bodies melt together.
Flesh sweats with fire.
Passion burns the room in flames and melts the night.
Our kiss sucks out all the air as we forget to breath.
Passion turns to great sex, turns into an incredible fuck.
Night turns into day as we go on lost in sins.
We exploded like a super nova and collapse.
We lay too tired to talk.
Asleep we fall in dreams of ecstasy.

Brigit Astar
01-10-2009, 09:10 AM
very nice

Scorpio8
01-10-2009, 10:17 AM
I liked it very much.

Free verse is a great medium for expression.

The words inspire some great visual imagery and
set the tone for what the writer wants us the reader
to understand and feel.

It works well here.

OldHorny
06-03-2009, 02:23 PM
Thanx I liked it even tyhough it has taken me a while to get to it

comsmith22
06-05-2009, 06:49 PM
Good ... thanks